Talk:Chapter 13/@comment-27888570-20190621203204/@comment-35587728-20190623224628

Where to split up the chapters really depends on how you want to split up the various plots.

If Chapter 13 ends with "In Love and War" it is the natural conclusion of the search for Yeza that sparked this entire chapter into motion way back in "Homeward Bound".

If it ends with "Intervention" then it's a cliffhanger. The plotline given focus is the Xhorhasian politics (which don't really start until "In Love and War" after the Beacon is returned). I honestly think this isn't a good place to end it as chapters in the past have tried to be self-contained story arcs. "Intervention" is the second act of a story arc where the plan goes awry and will (hopefully) be resolved in the third act. Cutting it off before that third act gets underway (hunting Oban down) doesn't really work in my opinion.

But if we're saying the Xhorhasian stuff takes precedent over the Nott-Yeza storyline, then "Domestic Respite" is a more natural place to end it as it concludes with them more or less agreeing to side with the Dynasty over the Empire and tell the Bright Queen about what they've discovered.

Personally, I feel like since the Xhorhasian political stuff doesn't really kick off until after the conclusion of "The Favor" that it should be be relegated to Chapter 14, else the first nine episodes feel a bit disconnected from what the rest of the chapter is focusing on.

Also, the war has been smouldering in the background since the end of Chapter 9 with "Midnight Espionage", just because the Mighty Nein are seeing it from a different side doesn't make it a seperate plotline. It strikes me more as something that will persist throughout multiple chapters rather than something we should use to break chapters up. I'd recommend focusing on what plotline is driving the group in the immediate moment (like how Chapter 12 follows Fjord's Uk'otoa stuff, Chapter 13 can be about Nott trying to reunite with Yeza) rather than the overarching goals and plotlines that they will be trying to achieve throughout (such as improving diplomatic relations) until it takes absolute precedent over everything else in the story (like how the Chroma Conclave was the overarching goal in Chapters 4-6 but the chapters themselves were divided up by immediate threats and locations rather than the defeat of each foe). Politics has become important to the Mighty Nein and will continue to be vital going forward but ultimately it's Yasha's backstory, Oban and the Angel of Irons that is their immediate focus at the moment and more likely to be a plot that will conclude sooner rather than later like the politics which will persist into the future no matter what.

As for the titles, I like "Orphanmaker's Ordeal" as a placeholder for Chapter 14. "Shades of Grey" is fine title even if it makes me think of a certain book about fifty shades everytime I hear it.